notes on narrations for video

Hannah’s notes…
Don’t use whatever, say the whole law. How are all these facts related to your topic. Practice to not stutter. Good argument but cut short some of the material. Slow down in your speech and try to make the argument more apparent and maybe focus on the idea of the graffiti standing up there with murderers. Somehow draw on the idea that graffiti is art and not a crime.
Kate’s notes…
Sprout fund. Is it a narrative or a question? I like the specific examples that you give. Combined with pictures it will make the narrative very interesting. Explain how the murals are different from graffiti and how you can tell what a sprout mural is. Explain how each mural had an impact in the area it is placed. Maybe explain the process of a specific mural and how it came to be.
Patrice’s notes…
Try note to be so broad with the idea of in the world. Provide some specific examples of fountains. Maybe focus more on the fountain as a whole instead of the water by itself. The work focuses mainly on the water and not the architecture. Maybe bring to light the architectural nature of fountains and how they affect the landscape.